Need Advice. Please let me know your opinion.

So.
I wrote a fic.
It's different than most fics I write.
( this is why it is different. read at your own risk. )

but I like it so far.

This is the opening paragraph:

( read here. four sentances. albeit short sentances. )

Here's my question.


Should I put it on here?


I know that fic such as this is not usually accepted well because of the creepy fangirl-y tendancies of most het writers...
but I want to know what you, my possible audience thinks.

please be honest.
say what you want, I'm going to screen comments so don't be afraid of what your peers might say.